CHILDREN OF THE WITCH in a paragraph

Children of the Witch is a 71,000-word fantasy that imagines an American West where misfits and marshals in an arms race with Rasputin seek to weaponize demons. Peter Slips Noose just wants to escape his brother and the blimp-borne pirate crew of The New Delight, reconcile with his grandmother, and have some good friends. Instead, after a visit to the gallows, he finds the Three Sisters and their many, many husbands, Henry Johnson and his hammer, and pentagram wearing United Americas’ marshals. And the demons they are summoning. So many demons. To finally find a family, he must pick between his estranged grandmother and his hostile brother, each trying to exploit the conjuring.

FRIENDS OF THE CLAM in a paragraph

FRIENDS OF THE CLAM is a 71,000-word literary novel. Neurodivergent and obsessive, mid-twenty-year-old Curtis Love has a tricky life. A perfect honeymoon leads to a less than perfect marriage, a demanding boss, and a mysterious job. And now, his marriage is over. Determined to change himself and find an ideal social life somewhere between loneliness and social anxiety, he faces an employer who will only meet in video games, drunk runners, and angry churchgoers. Curtis sees his chance to balance between too many friends and too few evaporate. Then he meets June and Donnabella. Changing himself becomes his only option as he tries to find and fit into a family. 

Twelve Reasons You Should Keep Writing

by Sarah Ruhl and from the Jan/Feb 2023 Poets & Writers.

Sometime I forget why I should keep writing. I hope you make a list of your own. Here is mine.

Write for God. The cave. The envelope.

Write for your mother. Your father. Your friend who is sick.

Write for the future. Write for the past. Write for the present, but sideways.

Write for the child who saw cruelty, and for those dispossessed of language.

Write for your daughter. Write for your son. If they don’t exist, write for the dream of them.

Write for your uncle to weep, for your aunt to laugh. For your babysitter to cover her face with recognition.

Write for the church you walked past with a sign that read: THEATER AT SACRAMENT. And you misread it as: THEATER AS SACRAMENT.

Write for the accountants whose eyes are too tired at night for numbers. For the farmers who grow your corn.

Write for your teachers. Write for every single hour they left off writing their own sentences so that they could read yours.

Write to thank the books you love.

Write for yourself.

Write for God. The cave. And the envelope.

Reading drafts aloud

The last few months I’ve been revising by reading aloud and line-editing as I go. This is surprisingly satisfying, especially when I can read in big blocks of time, like three or four hours. Before these sentence-level changes, I made bigger structural changes by dragging and dropping or cutting large pieces of text. Once I had chapter-level changes made, I started on the sentences.

Once I’m done with the sentences, I’ll write a synopsis. Then I’ll write an elevator pitch.

I like this approach, but I think that the next time I start something big, I’ll begin by drafting pitches, then the synopsis, then a manuscript. I’ll do structural changes and proofreading in the same order as I am currently.

Reading 2022

2022/12/30Demon CopperheadBarbara Kingsolver
2022/12/28Every Heart a Doorway (Wayward Children, #1)Seanan McGuire
2022/12/15The LatecomerJean Hanff Korelitz
2022/12/11Wonderbook: The Illustrated Guide to Creating Imaginative FictionJeff VanderMeer
2022/11/30Persephone (Into Shadow, #2)Lev Grossman
2022/11/28The Garden (Into Shadow, #1)Tomi Adeyemi
2022/11/26What the Dead Know (Into Shadow, #4)Nghi Vo
2022/11/26Undercover (Into Shadow, #5)Tamsyn Muir
2022/11/24Out of the Mirror, Darkness (Into Shadow, #7)Garth Nix
2022/11/07Eleanor Oliphant Is Completely FineGail Honeyman
2022/10/23Nettle & BoneT. Kingfisher
2022/10/09Remarkably Bright CreaturesShelby Van Pelt
2022/10/08Hollow Kingdom (Hollow Kingdom, #1)Kira Jane Buxton
2022/09/21The Secret HistoryDonna Tartt
2022/09/02The Vanishing HalfBrit Bennett
2022/08/29Travel Light (Peapod Classics)Naomi Mitchison
2022/08/19Stamped from the Beginning: The Definitive History of Racist Ideas in AmericaIbram X. Kendi
2022/08/08The TreesPercival Everett
2022/08/07A Gentleman in MoscowAmor Towles
2022/07/29Indemnity Only (V.I. Warshawski, #1)Sara Paretsky
2022/07/20The Pushcart Prize XLVI: Best of the Small Presses 2022 EditionBill Henderson
2022/07/19Oryx and Crake (MaddAddam, #1)Margaret Atwood
2022/07/14Small FavorsErin A. Craig
2022/07/04The Calculating Stars (Lady Astronaut Universe, #1)Mary Robinette Kowal
2022/06/28The Practice of Creative Writings: A Guide for StudentsHeather Sellers
2022/06/18Mrs. DallowayVirginia Woolf
2022/06/15Craft in the Real World: Rethinking Fiction Writing and WorkshoppingMatthew Salesses
2022/05/18The Naive and the Sentimental Novelist (The Charles Eliot Norton Lectures)Orhan Pamuk
2022/04/30Collected FictionsJorge Luis Borges
2022/04/29I Am Not a Serial Killer (John Cleaver, #1)Dan Wells
2022/04/25Harlem Shuffle (Ray Carney, #1)Colson Whitehead
2022/04/14Monstrous Regiment (Discworld, #31; Industrial Revolution, #3)Terry Pratchett
2022/04/05The Five WoundsKirstin Valdez Quade
2022/03/11The SentenceLouise Erdrich
2022/03/04Self-Editing for Fiction Writers: How to Edit Yourself Into PrintRenni Browne
2022/02/26The Final Girl Support GroupGrady Hendrix
2022/02/16Friday BlackNana Kwame Adjei-Brenyah
2022/02/01A Wizard’s Guide to Defensive BakingT. Kingfisher
2022/01/22StardustNeil Gaiman
2022/01/16MatrixLauren Groff
2022/01/05Cloud Cuckoo LandAnthony Doerr

THE SECRET PHYSICS in a paragraph (two versions)

In The Secret Physics, a dying woman’s final whisper threatens to undo everything her son Jonathan knows about their relationship, his life, and reality itself. Years before, a stranger named Simon interrupted an innocent girl’s childhood, changing her life and leaving her hungry for revenge. Wendy vows that she will have the power that was meant to be hers, but when her life collides with Jonathan’s she learns Simon still seeks to do her and her family harm. When he returns to battle Wendy, the only person who can save her is Jonathan, the man whose trust she betrayed and life she destroyed.

In The Secret Physics, readers meet Jonathan Norton and Wendy Daily, a mild-mannered mortician and a beautiful linguist, married but not exactly in love. To save their grandson from an otherworldly poisoning, Jonathan races from world to world searching for Wendy and doubting his sanity. All of her family is at risk. Her parents disappeared decades before, perhaps exiled by a man who once saved her. Now Wendy must journey toward revenge and Jonathan must search for help through realities neither can understand. They must survive each other and the plot to destroy them to defend a loved one from a deadly, poisonous transformation.

Learning from Hanff Korelitz

And then they were eighteen, and not just leaving home but desperate to begin three permanently separate adult lives, which is exactly what would’ve happened if the Oppenheimer family hadn’t taken a turn for the strange and quite possibly unprecedented. But it did – we did – and that has made all the difference.

The Latecomer by Jean Hanff Korelitz

These sentences end a prologue about triplets that seem to dislike each other, or are at least indifferent toward each other, notwithstanding one parent’s efforts. The prologue hooked me, and I’m enjoying continuing to read the book.

What do these sentences teach about writing?

  • The longer sentence clearly announces a desire and immediately complicates it in a way that implies questions: Strange how? Unprecedented? Really? Readers are likely to read on with an interest in the answers to those questions.
  • A process–leaving home and establishing independent identities–is interrupted. How that process might continue or how it might become something new or what happens if the process is stopped . . . these are all potential sources of tension. The sentences have implications the rest of the book can explore.
  • The second sentence is much shorter, which provides a nice contrast. It also narrates from a self-effacing “we” which appears for the first time in what had seemed a third-person text. The “we” is also in tension with the dislike the triplets have stated for each other. In some sense, they, it seems, speak together. It’s also possible that one of them is comfortable claiming to speak for the others. Which of these two possibilities is the case? Readers read on to find out.
  • Finally, the last phrase is an allusion to Frost’s “The Road Not Taken,” which emphasizes the theme of “a turn for the strange” verses remaining typical that seems to be developing.

Time and narrative

In other words, people naturally create stories, breaking up those clock-ticking seconds and replacing them with dramatic rising action, heart-stopping climaxes, and resolutions. Storytellers “lengthen time” with focus and careful description and contract time with descriptive brevity, summary, or even absence. The simple choice of when to start and when to stop the story imposes significance and value on certain events and diminishes others.

Kylie Nielson Turley